Title: FanGirl
Genre: YA
Ms. Snark Post #3
In FANGIRL Ruby Miller is cast as an iconic zombie hunter in the television adaptation of her favorite graphic novel. Between navigating hot actors and script lines the eighteen year-old learns that trusting her instincts in a world of agents and paparazzi is as terrifying as coming face to face with a reanimated corpse
You've done a great job improving this. I just have one small question - is trusting her instincts terrifying, or the world of agents and paparazzi? Trusting her instincts is a vague concept. And this is real nit picky - but I think you need a noun after navigating. She's not navigating the actors, she's navigating a sea of them. Does that make sense?
ReplyDelete"Between navigating a sea of hot actors and script lines, the eighteen-year-old learns that the world of agents and paparazzi is as terrifying as a reanimated corpse."
Good job and good luck!
This sounds like a good read!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Tarak. I'd also suggest removing the title as the opener. I think Ruby Miller should be where it starts.
Hope this helps! Good luck. :)