Monday, October 17, 2011

Logline #12

Title: Master of the Miracles
Genre: Literary/Historical Fiction

When Ora's attempts at conception fail she starts to think that God wants more from her than prayer. She begins to have stigmatic visions of a 2nd Century woman named Bruriah. In a quest to learn more, Ora studies Talmud with a Yeshiva student who she should not be speaking to - let alone meeting in private. When she becomes pregnant with twins that were not conceived with her husband, Ora is confronted with the same choice Bruriah faced 2000 years before.


  1. Ooh, this sounds like a scandalous story!

    I'd suggest putting a comma after "fail". I think I'd like the flow of the second sentence if I knew the student's name.

    I'm also wondering what the consequences are? Is it that she may lose her husband or is there more?

    Hope this helps. Good luck! :)

  2. Ha! That's funny. I took out the name because in the last critique ppl said there were too many names and I should take it out. I guess you just do the best you can. Nothing is ever going to be perfect.

  3. You're correct, Rena! This sounds like a very interesting story. I'm already wanting to know the history behind this. Good luck!