TITLE: Issue 339
GENRE: YA (Magical Realism)
Comic book character and teen superhero Skye gets fed up watching the comics kill off everyone he loves, so he shoots his author. Now he struggles between his identity as a hero and his reality as a murderer as he's caught between his own suffering, and the suffering he's caused, and when the publishing company hires a new writer, Skye must decide whether one more murder will save his world, or damn his soul.
I love this. A lot. I remember watching this on Pitch Live and laughing out loud. I would just cut the part in between "as a murderer" and "and when" You don't need the part about the suffering. Great job!ReplyDelete
I've seen this before too and love it. I hope an agent snatches it up.ReplyDelete
I also agree with deleting the part about the suffering. By saying he's struggling, it's implied. It would also serve to tighten this up a little.
Great job and best wishes.
I love this. But the second sentence is run-on. I'd break it up between "suffering he's caused/when the publishing company." I agree with the above entries about economy of words.ReplyDelete
I love this concept! I agree that you don't need the suffering bit. The rest so strong on its own.ReplyDelete
This is so great! Ditto on pulling the suffering bit, but the rest is awesome. I want to read this so badly, now!ReplyDelete
Love it! My only question is whether this is upper MG instead of YA...but obv can't tell w/o having read any of it.ReplyDelete