GENRE: YA Speculative
Upon discovering she’s living in a coma-induced dream world where she can have anything she wants, sixteen-year-old Lauren thinks she’s found her lucky break. However, when she learns her family is crumbling without her in real life, her dream quickly becomes a nightmare; while she sleeps, her subconscious rules, and it will do anything to keep her from waking—even if it means driving Lauren out of her mind to keep her living inside it.
"Sixteen year old Lauren lives in a coma induced dreamworld, where she can have anything she wants, but when she learns her real-life family is crumbling without her, her dream quickly becomes a nightmare; while she sleeps, her subconscious rules, and it will do anything to keep her from waking—even if it means driving Lauren insane."
ReplyDeleteJust a little something to tighten it up. Love LOVE this concept. Very Coraline meets inception. Love.
Good luck!
Yes! Love this concept, too. And especially like what Authoress did with the edits. Bravo.
ReplyDeleteI love Authoress's suggestion. The only tweak I would make to that would be to put a period after nightmare and start a new sentence.
ReplyDeleteGood luck!
Thanks for the feedback, Authoress, RedCard10, and Carmen! It means a lot to me, and I'm definitely liking your suggestions, Authoress and Carmen!
ReplyDeleteI also love Authoress's suggestion. But like Carmen, I also prefer a period to the semiccolon... Great concept.
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