TITLE: Cassandra of the Crescent Moon
GENRE: MG Fantasy
When her grandmother is betrayed by a fellow witch and kidnapped by magic-hating vigilantes, twelve-year-old Cassie's only hope is a handful of witches sworn never to use their powers against others. Cassie must convince them to help find the traitor and stand up to the enemy – with or without magic – in order to rescue the only family she has left.
Looks solid to me! A detail about Cassie's character (shy? timid?) would be a bonus, though, to hint more at the character's arc...ReplyDelete
Robyn, I'd love to, but I'm already at 63 words (out of 60 :P). Thanks for the encouragement, though.ReplyDelete
I hear you... Though did you see that Authoress is now allowing 310 words total for both log and first pages instead of limiting the logline to 60, specifically? So if you wanted to throw a single adjective in there you'd just have to cut your 250 words down to 246 instead of 247.ReplyDelete
Someone correct me if I've misunderstood!
No, I think you've got it right, Robyn! And I agree that adding a detail about Cassie's personality in there would be great. Otherwise, this is spot on. Good luck!ReplyDelete
I really like this logline. A few suggestions on how to shorten it up a bit:ReplyDelete
"When her grandmother is betrayed by a fellow witch and kidnapped by magic-hating vigilantes, twelve-year-old Cassie's only hope is a handful of witches sworn never to use their powers against others. Cassie must convince them to find the traitor and fight the enemy – with or without magic – to rescue the only family she has left."
By the way, I love the line: "magic-hating vigilantes."
Good luck with BD!
I'm just curious...is Cassie also a witch? Sounds very solid! Nice work.ReplyDelete
And Robyn - thanks for the update on extra words.
If you need to shorten it up I really like Jessica's suggestion. Overall, great log line!ReplyDelete
Thanks Jessica for the suggestion. Dana, yes Cassie's a witch too, but just learning how her powers work, which is why she needs help.ReplyDelete
Thanks, everyone, for your input.