tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post6771939132535207231..comments2023-04-23T16:33:39.062-04:00Comments on K.T. Crowley: Last Call Logline #6K.T. Crowleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-9439336966156942702012-11-02T09:04:57.815-04:002012-11-02T09:04:57.815-04:00Thanks Jessica for the suggestion. Dana, yes Cass...Thanks Jessica for the suggestion. Dana, yes Cassie's a witch too, but just learning how her powers work, which is why she needs help.<br /><br />Thanks, everyone, for your input.K Callardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15689825742559394896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-67709726953344643122012-11-02T00:02:17.482-04:002012-11-02T00:02:17.482-04:00If you need to shorten it up I really like Jessica...If you need to shorten it up I really like Jessica's suggestion. Overall, great log line!Anita Saxenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12444339735834716979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-82550998396176123502012-11-01T18:39:48.534-04:002012-11-01T18:39:48.534-04:00I'm just curious...is Cassie also a witch? Sou...I'm just curious...is Cassie also a witch? Sounds very solid! Nice work. <br /><br />And Robyn - thanks for the update on extra words.Dana Ehttp://momslifeponderings.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-21244568349411133342012-11-01T16:59:58.486-04:002012-11-01T16:59:58.486-04:00I really like this logline. A few suggestions on h...I really like this logline. A few suggestions on how to shorten it up a bit:<br /><br />"When her grandmother is betrayed by a fellow witch and kidnapped by magic-hating vigilantes, twelve-year-old Cassie's only hope is a handful of witches sworn never to use their powers against others. Cassie must convince them to find the traitor and fight the enemy – with or without magic – to rescue the only family she has left."<br /><br />By the way, I love the line: "magic-hating vigilantes."<br /><br />Good luck with BD!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01978474302944767837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-12123527051869668372012-11-01T16:56:29.294-04:002012-11-01T16:56:29.294-04:00No, I think you've got it right, Robyn! And I ...No, I think you've got it right, Robyn! And I agree that adding a detail about Cassie's personality in there would be great. Otherwise, this is spot on. Good luck!Juliahttp://www.juliathewritergirl.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-21238235183438571592012-11-01T16:44:22.535-04:002012-11-01T16:44:22.535-04:00I hear you... Though did you see that Authoress is...I hear you... Though did you see that Authoress is now allowing 310 words total for both log and first pages instead of limiting the logline to 60, specifically? So if you wanted to throw a single adjective in there you'd just have to cut your 250 words down to 246 instead of 247. <br /><br />Someone correct me if I've misunderstood!Robyn Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01419207395478885010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-40354874520520457262012-11-01T15:28:12.468-04:002012-11-01T15:28:12.468-04:00Robyn, I'd love to, but I'm already at 63 ...Robyn, I'd love to, but I'm already at 63 words (out of 60 :P). Thanks for the encouragement, though.K Callardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15689825742559394896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-87314965557450510762012-11-01T15:24:26.276-04:002012-11-01T15:24:26.276-04:00Looks solid to me! A detail about Cassie's cha...Looks solid to me! A detail about Cassie's character (shy? timid?) would be a bonus, though, to hint more at the character's arc... Robyn Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01419207395478885010noreply@blogger.com