TITLE: The Hourglass Bridge
Diamond has never done anything more adventurous than stray from her homework roster – until an ancient ritual yanks her into a hidden, magical civilization in the 16th century. There she must join a dangerously chivalrous wizard and his crossbow wielding twin sister to defend her ancestors from an immortal witch who threatens to destroy them, even if it means embracing the corruptible powers she never knew she had.
I think this is really solid! Great voice and interesting concept. :) I do think the dash after "roster" is unnecessary, and "crossbow wielding" should technically have a dash between it (i.e. crossbow-wielding). Other than that, nice job!ReplyDelete
I really liked the premise of this story. Your style/voice is felt throughout the logline. Other than the dashes that Steph mentioned above, I think this is wonderful. Would definitely want to read. GREAT JOB!!ReplyDelete
Definitely want to read this! Voice is strong and I really got a feel for the story's GMC. Awesome job!ReplyDelete
I really liked this, too. Nice job. I agree with the grammar issues Stephanie addressed. Congrats!ReplyDelete