BD One Last Chance Logline #27

Round 3 Original Post #22

TITLE: Waterstone

GENRE: Literary Historical Fiction

All her life, Mattie Calhoun has yearned for Pa’s gift—the ability to dowse water. His death, in Spring of 1900, followed by the arrival of Hill Bell seeking a dowser for his family’s hotel, sparks her determination: she’ll imitate Pa’s every move, then, take his place. Her failure costs her freedom when she must go to work as a servant, ironically leading to a journey of self-discovery and renewal in Atlanta, the Phoenix City.

BD One Last Chance Logline #26

Title:   THE GAMMY GAT LETTERS

GENRE:   Upmarket adult fiction

 

In THE GAMMY GAT LETTERS, nothing is going right for ten year old Jake Gatlin, as he begins school in a new town. He needs to talk to somebody. He figures his grandmother, Gammy Gat, is just the person. Only she’s dead. He writes to her anyway. Ten years later, after Jake is killed in Afghanistan, Marshall, his father, discovers the secret letters.

BD One Last Chance Logline #25

TITLE:  SUSPENDED STATE
GENRE:  YA paranormal thriller

When a hospital employee preys on unconscious patients, a seventeen year-old girl’s soul becomes trapped inside his body. Now Lauren must find a way out before she disappears like his other victims. Or worse…becomes a permanent part of him.

BD One Last Chance Logline #24

TITLE: Rachel on Fire

GENRE: YA Contemporary

 Rachel knows in her heart that rumours about Tom killing his parents in a house fire are only embers of broken truths – truths that she will uncover and embrace as she moves through a fiery series of firsts in a courageous fall into love. 

BD One Last Chance Logline #23

TITLE: Five Man Fugue
GENRE: Author-as-character Meta Fiction/Urban Thriller

On a winter night in Chicago, four men cross paths: a septuagenarian mourning his deceased wife, a homeless man defending his secret love, a penniless dilettante anticipating his inheritance and an ex-convict struggling to reform.  Each overlapping story sheds further light on the others, and on our mysterious author, Robin Love, who intends to craft a love story for himself even if it means sacrificing his characters along the way. 

BD One Last Chance Logline #22

Round 3 Original Post #31

TITLE: Drego's Sword

GENRE: YA epic fantasy

Drego's journey to stop the evil conqueror, Gordar, takes him far from home, into the arms of a headstrong young woman, and to a darker, more violent part of himself he hadn’t known existed.

BD One Last Chance Logline #21

TITLE: WISHLOCK

GENRE: MG Fantasy

When eleven-year-old Timothy delivers a box concealing dark magic there are unwanted aftereffects: grey fur and a ferocious appetite for cheese. A hidden manuscript offers Timothy hope, something written in its pages could reverse the magic that has transformed him into a part-mouse, but he must use all his smarts to retrieve it; housed in a library, the lock on the door is forged from unbreakable magic.

BD One Last Chance Logline #20

TITLE: Codename Eagle Chick
GENRE: YA Spy Thriller

When a Secret Service Agent tracks down the president’s missing son, he finds him with a battered CIA recruit, an overly-suave CIA operative, and an Irish coffee-loving tech guru, all out to find “the faction” and why they want the president’s son dead.

BD One Last Chance Logline #19

TITLE: Imminent
GENRE: YA Paranormal Romance

Seventeen-year-old Alexa discovers, after falling for a new boy, that she's at the center of a paranormal war and must protect humans from her enemies while saving herself from them in the process.

BD One Last Chance Logline #18

Round 3 Original Post #13

Title: The Truth About Titus Oates
Genre: Historical Fiction

Nat Thompson blames the loss of his post as the Licenser on Titus Oates, a preacher who has sent Restoration London into crisis with revelations of a Popish Plot. Eager to provide for his young wife Anne, Nat attacks Oates in the press, a lucrative but dangerous decision When Oates blackmails Anne, forcing her to become a spy in her own home and has Nat arrested on the night their newborn baby dies, the only way out of their predicament is to prove that the Plot is a complete fiction and make public the shocking truth about Titus Oates.

BD One Last Chance Logline #17

Title: GHOST RIVER

Genre: Paranormal Mystery

When Veronica moves to a quiet river marina, she finds her peace shattered by murder, mystery and Clara, the ghost of a shopaholic nun with an addiction to Liz Claiborne Outlets. A friend is accused of the murder but Veronica thinks he’s been framed, even if the police don’t. So, led by clues from the ghost, she sets out to find the real killer, unaware the killer wants to find her first.

BD One Last Chance Logline #16

TITLE: Maid-of-the-Wave

GENRE: Literary

Rob Walsh, a world-class sailor paralyzed in a mysterious car accident, confronts daunting odds to regain his life, but his biggest challenge lies in his own forgiveness.

BD One Last Chance Logline #15

TITLE: Jane, Body and Soul

GENRE: YA Light Sci Fi

When his first love is killed in a prom night car accident, Daniel, a teen science geek, stuns the world by using his knowledge of radical new medical research to bring her back from the dead. But now Jane’s body is failing, her condition defies scientific explanation, and she’s more interested in her “near-death experiences” than in recovering her health. Daniel must find a way to save her—or watch her suffer and die again.

BD One Last Chance Logline #14

TITLE: The Treasure of a Dragon's Heart
GENRE: Adult Paranormal Romance

A shapeshifting dragon must choose between love and survival when she falls for the modern-day knight who catches her stealing the jewels she needs to defend herself from her murderous father.

BD One Last Chance Logline #13

TITLE: Imperfectly Fine

GENRE: YA Contemporary (with thriller elements)

Sixteen-year-old Skylar Benson lives with cystic fibrosis and a singular truth: She's supposed to die first. But after witnessing her rockstar father's murder, she must do the one thing she never expected--survive. Skylar resents being broken by birth and scarred by life, and even faking fine is impossible once she starts having flashbacks to the night her dad died.

Skylar must choose between self-destructive escape and finding a way to embrace her imperfect life. A choice made easier with Dad's favorite white powder but more complicated by Noah Stillwater, a fiercely loyal friend with an enigmatic past and an infuriating tenacity for hope. Then there's Cole Monroe, the younger brother of an ex-boyfriend Skylar can't quite shake. Cole is as lethal and alluring as his cocaine habit, and all her friends think she should know better.

But Skylar knows Cole is dangerous. She's counting on it.

BD One Last Chance Logline #12

Round 3 Original Post #36

Title: Lifeweaver
Genre: Epic Fantasy

When Talyn gained the ability to transfer death from one person to another, he never imagined the king would exploit such miracles to incite a war. Now, he'll have to commit treason and rely on the honor of a convicted murderer if he wants to prevent thousands of deaths -- including his own.

BD One Last Chance Logline #11

TITLE: Beyond The River
GENRE: Literary Fiction

1999: Brad Lucas has just made a fortune selling the dot-com he started in college with his cocksure business partner, Dean. Their odd, antagonistic friendship has deteriorated over the years, but before going their separate ways, Dean invites Brad on a fly-fishing trip. Hiking into the wilds of Northern California, Brad begins to question Dean’s motives. When Dean’s elaborate hoax unravels, Brad must not only save himself, but also decide whether Dean is worth saving.

BD One Last Chance Logline #10

TITLE: SHADOW OF A CRESCENT MOON
GENRE: contemporary with a paranormal twist

When twelve-year-old Sadie Elliott’s secret psychic vision
reveals a horrific car accident, she must make a choice: continue
hiding her ability from her skeptical mother or search for the girl
who has lived only in her visions, until now.

BD One Last Chance Logline #9

TITLE: Faithless Rose

GENRE: YA Paranormal

Killed at the hands of King Henry VIII’s men and brought back to life as a succubus, seventeen-year-old Amelia Godwin cannot change her fate. But, she can change the fate of her kidnapped twin brother, if only she can find him. In a journey of self-discovery and revenge, Amelia must decide what is more important, family or retaliation.

BD One Last Chance Logline #8

Round 3 Original Post #32

TITLE: THE ONES
GENRE: YA Soft Sci-Fi

High school junior Mina Gale and Nico Payne, the class bad boy, are
numerological soul mates; rare and powerful ‘double elevens.’ When a
Physics professor harnesses their energy to force open the doors
between eleven parallel universes, the pair is accidentally thrust
into another dimension. Now, they must somehow find their way home--in
spite of the holes that keep ripping in the fabric of space each time
they kiss.

BD One Last Chance Logline #7

Title: Children of Ink

Genre: YA Urban Fantasy

Fifteen year old Callypso Moon can secretly create with words but when she stumbles across a note written by her dead father she discovers that said gift might not be so secret. When one of her father's old enemies sends men to kidnap her, Callypso finds herself suddenly thrust into a world of unresolved grudges and gifts that rival her own and she must decide whether or not to bail out as quickly as possible, or help others out of the mess her father created.

BD One Last Chance Logline #6

TITLE: The Obsession Begins
GENRE: Urban Fantasy

A downtrodden office assistant, struggling to change careers, unwittingly unleashes an ancient and deadly obsession, which she inspired in a past life. 

BD One Last Chance Logline #5

TITLE: Pandorious

GENRE: MG Fantasy/Adventure

When lonely twelve-year-old Haven Hitchcock opens an enchanted book, she releases a curse that gives her the ability to bring inanimate objects to life. Haven’s new magic rocks, but her spells spin out of control when she awakens a field of pumpkins whose mischief quickly turns to mayhem. She’ll have to reach out to her not so horrible classmates for help, or the menacing gourds will turn everyone into pumpkinheads – forever.

BD One Last Chance Logline #4

TITLE: Harold – The Kid Who Ruined My Life and Saved the Day

GENRE: MG, contemporary

Harold has ruined twelve-year-old Jake’s life for the last time. So what if Harold has Asperger’s and is a genius when it comes to baseball trivia and sixth grade Algebra. Jake’s D-O-N-E and he’ll do anything to ditch Harold and his second place baseball team of six years and play shortstop for the undefeated Comets.

BD One Last Chance Logline #3

TITLE: Warriors Over Darkness and the Unsettled Grave

GENRE: YA Urban Fantasy

Orphaned assassin Aleera lives to exterminate daemonic creatures, but when an act of revenge becomes prime-time news in the underground world, she is identified as the hidden link to an ancient prophesy unfolding. Locked in battle between divine Warriors and daemonic lords seeking to ignite the prophesy to lead a rebellion against the Warriors and eradicate humanity, Aleera must uncover her unknown past so she doesn’t become the martyr for the rise of evil.

BD One Last Chance Logline #2

Title: Abegale Force

Genre: Upper MG Magical Realism Adventure

Thirteen year-old Abegale wants to know if a mysterious old lady with ties to her grandmother’s past can be trusted when she tells Abegale her beloved grandmother is not dead and somewhere near-by. This grim old lady instructs Abegale to find her grandmother’s "medicine” book in the hopes of getting Abegale to disclose the whereabouts of her grandmother.When Abegale finds the book, she discovers the true identity of her grandmother, mixed in with magic cards, and strange uses for plants and weeds. But Abegale must act quickly, if she hopes to rescue Grandma before she’s trapped forever this time.

BD One Last Chance Logline #1

TITLE: The Duel
GENRE: Historical Romantic Suspense /1730s Britain

A Scottish baronet’s daughter anticipates a marriage of convenience to an aristocratic cousin until her aunt’s matchmaking goes awry and a rakish Lowland baron vies with his sworn enemy for her affections. He doesn’t expect to lose his heart or find her leading a Jacobite conspiracy while he spies for the Crown. Can he save the Prime Minister without betraying her confidence, or will exacting his revenge on her cousin cost him her love?

Submissions Window Is Now Closed!!

The submission window for the Baker's Dozen "One Last Chance" Round is now closed as we've reach 60 entries.  Sorry to those of you who didn't make it.  Stop by tomorrow morning at 8 AM EDT to read and critique the entries!!

And remember to stop by my blog often as I offer rounds like this almost monthly so that everyone has a open, friendly forum to receive valuable feedback on their work from our peers.

Thanks and good luck, everyone!!  So proud of each of you.

One More Chance, Baker's Dozen Hopefuls!!!

This is what you've been waiting for, friends!  I have the honor and pleasure of hosting another very special critique round (I love this!), in support of the hopeful entrants of this year's Baker's Dozen, hosted by the generous and wonderful Miss Authoress.  If you entered her "Logline Critique Round #3" or weren't lucky enough to make it in any of her 3 lottery rounds, you may submit your logline here for critiquing.  This round is open only to the entrants of round 3 and hopefuls who did not make it in any of the 3 rounds previously offered via Authoress. 

Please send submissions to ktcritiques [AT] gmail.com by 10 PM EDT Friday night, October 26.  I will post them Saturday morning, October 27, at KTCROWLEY.COM for critiquing.  I'll accept up to 60 entries.

In the subject, please state “BD LOGLINE” (and your original post number, if this is a revision).

Submit your logline just like when submitting to Miss Snark's First Victim.  Your submission should look like this:

TITLE: Your Title Here
GENRE: Your Genre Here

(Logline here.)

A confirmation email will be sent, but it may not be right away.  Only resend if you don't get one by the last hour of the submission window.  Once I receive 60 entries, an email will be sent to notify you if you didn't make the cut, so get those loglines in quickly!

If you enter, please critique five other entries, so that it's fair for everyone (it's also a great learning opportunity to polish your critiquing skills before the big event).  And spread the word please; the more critiques, the merrier!  Let's help everyone involved get as much feedback as possible. 

Good luck, everyone!  Can't wait to read some more fantastic loglines.

P.S. If you're not a follower of my blog, I'd love it if you'd follow my journey and join the fun!  There are several ways via the right-hand side of the screen.  I try to offer open critique rounds monthly to help writers like you perfect your work.  Our already amazing writing community only gets better when we help each other.  :)

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #18

Original Post #36

TITLE: CATCHER'S KEEPER

GENRE: ALTERNATE HISTORICAL FICTION

December 1980. Alden and his brother feel compelled to prevent the attack on John Lennon after learning the killer was inspired by Alden’s published memoir. 

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #17

Original Post #10

Title: Interwoven Deceptions

Genre: Urban Fantasy

A blind educator vows to rescue her students, kidnapped by demons, with the aid of her police detective lover and her mentor. She must also reinstate her psychic talents to travel to the demon world to restore their isolation and stop them from conquering humanity.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #16

Original Post #14

TITLE: TALENTED

GENRE: YA light science-fiction

Gail hopes her life is beginning to order itself for the better. She discovers she has parents--she gets the chance to search for them. She discovers she can control fire--she thinks she's found a support group. There's a problem, though. The Community is hardly a support group. Their plans don’t include having Talenteds like Gail becoming too friendly with the world; and their plans have powerful support.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #15

Original Post #35

TITLE: THE OTHER SIDE OF SILENCE
GENRE: Adult Fantasy

Being kidnapped by the resurrected god of war and watching him raze Yemen wasn't part of Ava's 20th birthday plans. Ava’s panic is even greater than the U.N.’s. Ares mistakenly believes she has powers that will help him become Earth's only god, and intends to marry her. If he discovers she’s completely nonmagical, he'll kill her, but if she escapes, he'll kill her family.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #14

Original Post #33

TITLE: Hunted

GENRE: YA urban fantasy

Fifteen-year-old drama queen Zuza Biss is used to making mountains out of molehills. But when she suddenly develops healing abilities and a tendency to zap people, she finds out what puberty is like for superheros. Now she's being chased by bounty hunters, intent on dragging her to another dimension.  If she doesn't get the knack of controlling her powers, she'll be thrown through a portal into the hands of a criminal collector.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #13

Original Post #13

TITLE : DIYA
GENRE: YA mystery with paranormal elements

Her alcoholic movie star mom provides enough drama for Diya, until her aunt's nearly killed by a weapon belonging to her crush. She faces having to turn him in, or heed his warning – that her aunt was just a pawn. Diya's the intended victim. If she rejects his protection, she'll die at the hands of the real killer, driven by it's centuries-old blood lust to destroy every last member of her Indian birth family.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #12

Original Post #9

TITLE: Misery Loves Company
GENRE: General Fiction

When tragic events and lean times force ten year old Cotton Sparrow
and her family to take up residence in an old abandoned school bus,
she learns first-hand about poverty, hunger and hopelessness. Years
later, when a bitter Cotton returns home for her mother’s funeral, she
seeks overdue retribution against the townspeople for ignoring her
childhood plight while simultaneously recalling the harsh realities of
her mother’s untreated mental illness.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #11

Original Post #40

TITLE: WildFire

GENRE: YA Super-Fantasy Adventure

Zina Casperelli, 16-year-old genius, decides what kind of friend she is when her newest stray – a glowing amnesiac – becomes pivotal in an ancient conflict. She's the only one who sees him as a person rather than a brutal killer or the savior of humanity, and she won't let anyone decide his fate without doing all she can to protect him

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #10

Original Post #3

TITLE: The Looking-Glass House

GENRE: Literary Fiction

Cline, Texas, 1964: When a young nun becomes attracted to one of the pregnant teenage girls in her care, she must find a distraction.  But uncovering a string of murders isn't what she had in mind.  Now unraveling this mystery will endanger the lives of those she loves most, while bringing her closer to the one person she was trying to avoid.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #9

Original Post #32

Title: MAKING ARRANGEMENTS

Genre: Women's Fiction

Battling cancer, Lang Ellis spent her (supposed) final year of life making sure her soon-to-be widowed husband could manage without her. Ha. After he drops dead on the tennis court, Lang, alive and well,  learns one of his many secrets can cost her the most important thing she has: her family.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #8

Original Post #19

Title:  SILVER POOL OF LIGHT

Genre:  MG Fantasy

Eve and Jane, eleven-year-old friends separated by a hundred years, write back and forth to each other across the centuries in a magical diary.  But Jane, who dreams of leaving her Martha’s Vineyard farm, boards a whaling ship that Eve learns is doomed to disaster. Difficult choices Eve faces in the present threaten her chances of saving Jane in the past.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #7

Original Post #25

Title: Blame it on Meryl Streep

Genre: Women's Fiction

At age 28 Laura Sanders has never been in a relationship and given up on love. But when she watches the movie Mamma Mia she suddenly finds the perfect coach to a happier life at her side: Meryl Streep. Nobody but Laura can see and hear imaginary Meryl, but so what? Sometimes you have to lose yourself in a fantasy to fix your reality.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #6

Original Post #4

TITLE: Savage Jungle

GENRE: MG Sci/fi

Twelve-year-old techie Kreith and his uncle are stranded in an alien jungle with some of the deadliest and most evolved animals in the universe, and when Kreith gets separated from his injured uncle, he must rely on himself to find an abandoned research facility to call for help and get them out alive.

BD Round 2 Revised Logine #5

Original Post #20

TITLE: Stairs to the Past

GENRE: YA

 

Seventeen year old Jason goes into the attic of his home and finds himself in 1876. He falls for the maid who works for the 19^th century family that built his house, but struggles to understand why and how he can time travel so that he can see her whenever he wants.  After several surprising revelations from his own history, he decides he was sent to save her from her employer’s treacherous son.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #4

Original Post #29

TITLE: The Diary

GENRE: Historical Fiction

 

Margaret Macrae’s life is a shambles. An abuse victim falsely accused of murdering her mother, without family, money or friends, she knows nothing of her past and fears the future. When her great grandfather’s 200 year old diary mysteriously appears on Mother’s funeral table, she turns to it for answers about who she is. What she finds is a complete surprise.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #3

Original Post #27

TITLE: Endlessly Summer

GENRE: Women's Fiction

When Kira, a lawyer, unexpectedly loses her husband in a mysterious accident, she uncovers his steamy past. As her carefully constructed world falls apart, she realizes if she doesn’t break free from the confines of the boardroom and claim her freedom on a surfboard, she’ll soon forget how to live and love after loss.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #2

Original Post #30

TITLE: Replacement Reality
GENRE: YA light Sci-Fi/Fantasy

Sam knows she should be thrilled when she wins a replacement reality, a perfect alternate life in a glittery high-tech world, but instead feels conflicted.  With only four hours left until she must claim the prize she cannot refuse, Sam shifts between past reflections and the present to try to save the person she already is.

BD Round 2 Revised Logline #1

Original Post #21

TITLE: The Legacy of the Eye
GENRE: Science Fiction

On a school-planet supposed to value merit over birthright, the top graduate of the Governance program discovers that all former headmasters have been from the same lineage and that the girl he just kissed is next in line.