tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post6521276401845373964..comments2023-04-23T16:33:39.062-04:00Comments on K.T. Crowley: BD One Last Chance Logline #32K.T. Crowleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-27249433240932097672012-10-28T15:57:58.460-04:002012-10-28T15:57:58.460-04:00Love it!!!
And these days, I think 13-year-olds ...Love it!!! <br /><br />And these days, I think 13-year-olds can be socialites, which is just sad. They should all be lucky enough to get "sentenced" to summer camp to gain some perspective on life. DJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14359760998871484565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-42096790964428415072012-10-27T17:29:16.252-04:002012-10-27T17:29:16.252-04:00Love this!!
I wouldn't change a thing.Love this!!<br /><br />I wouldn't change a thing.Carmenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01502915116446772081noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-43383875012054684512012-10-27T14:57:52.764-04:002012-10-27T14:57:52.764-04:00I like this a lot! =)
Only two things tripped me ...I like this a lot! =)<br /><br />Only two things tripped me up...the words "socialite" and "sentenced."<br /><br />I'm agreeing with the other posts that socialite for a 13 yr-old might be a stretch. I'd try a different word...popular? fashionable? celebrity wanna-be? Obviously, you know best what fits your story.<br /><br />Also, is Jessa ACTUALLY "sentenced" to summer camp or are her parents making her go? Maybe try to specify.<br /><br />Great job! You've summed things up quite nicely in just a few words. That's hard to do!Natasha Hawkinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09535719481335251794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-86987588148851440922012-10-27T14:47:12.020-04:002012-10-27T14:47:12.020-04:00I like this. It's solid. And I didn't hav...I like this. It's solid. And I didn't have any problem with the word socialite. I immediately had an image of Paris Hilton with a dig tucked under her arm.:) Good job!Rebeccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15525362690272102453noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-50587476765414281092012-10-27T12:48:08.708-04:002012-10-27T12:48:08.708-04:00Good work! Like Bill, I'm not convinced a 13-y...Good work! Like Bill, I'm not convinced a 13-year-old can be a socialite. How about "popular" or a version thereof.<br />Cheers!Lucianne Poolehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10687732495236270127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-57557545278615411292012-10-27T12:46:35.393-04:002012-10-27T12:46:35.393-04:00Great title! Sounds like a fun read! You may have ...Great title! Sounds like a fun read! You may have trouble pitching your story as MG with a 14-year-old boy. Manju Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18043840425498808764noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-69777498946455918002012-10-27T12:41:51.813-04:002012-10-27T12:41:51.813-04:00Hmmm. I like it. I definitely want to know more. I...Hmmm. I like it. I definitely want to know more. I don't know much about socialites, but never imagined a 13 year old could be one. Does she discover Isaac, as in, finds in the woods. Or does she meet him at school.<br /><br /><br />Good luck.<br />Bill Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12727407427730937429noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-35027354088791882512012-10-27T08:35:34.104-04:002012-10-27T08:35:34.104-04:00Ha! Sounds very fun and imaginative! Summer camp w...Ha! Sounds very fun and imaginative! Summer camp with a fairytale twist. This seems like a great way to tell a story about accepting who we are - in all our special differences. I like the title too - it's layered. I wonder what will happen between Jessa and Isaac?<br />Thanks!<br />vanessahttp://www.vanessashields.comnoreply@blogger.com