tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post5442856251528852686..comments2023-04-23T16:33:39.062-04:00Comments on K.T. Crowley: July Anything #8K.T. Crowleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-70945427131542119242012-08-02T20:35:15.339-04:002012-08-02T20:35:15.339-04:00I'm with everyone else. I enjoyed this. I fe...I'm with everyone else. I enjoyed this. I feel Madison's attachment to her grandpa and could almost see grandpa's grin. Great job!S.A. Husseyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16454457235580594733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-73080184560075578142012-08-02T13:59:04.850-04:002012-08-02T13:59:04.850-04:00Sorry for posting this late, I honestly thought I ...Sorry for posting this late, I honestly thought I had already posted:)<br /><br />What a great opening! I was immediately oriented by the well detailed setting. I loved the sound of the Marigold stem snapping, and it (somehow) drew me into the story.<br /><br />The voice is amazing! Sweet and caring. And I love Madison's emotional attachment to her Grandpa:)CarolineFrye.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00158333641073753659noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-23088551994009442942012-07-27T12:33:12.456-04:002012-07-27T12:33:12.456-04:00Thanks L.M. and Joseph. I appreciate the feedback...Thanks L.M. and Joseph. I appreciate the feedback and encouragement!Sarah Floydhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11202671048418865629noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-23950001406034101302012-07-26T22:25:19.119-04:002012-07-26T22:25:19.119-04:00Thanks for sharing your beginning. I also enjoyed ...Thanks for sharing your beginning. I also enjoyed it. Not much to comment on as it reads well to me. The only thing that confused me is that Jade is supposedly Madison's best friend forever and yet Grandpa calls him "your friend"... seems like he'd call Jade by name.<br /><br />Also can you "go around by yourself" with someone else? Or is that a bit of grandpa's humor?<br /><br />Best Wishes,<br />JosephJoseph Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12712270182152823454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-74295088493191027312012-07-26T15:49:50.301-04:002012-07-26T15:49:50.301-04:00This is adorable. I love the opening paragraph. It...This is adorable. I love the opening paragraph. It is very sensory oriented to me for some reason. Maybe alter 'on the perimeter' to sound less informative (everything else is so descriptive that this line leaves me waiting), and the 'But Grandpa' line (split it? maybe make it more 12yoish?). <br /><br />Cheers!L.M. Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05834881688010514126noreply@blogger.com