tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post1185566942129204300..comments2023-04-23T16:33:39.062-04:00Comments on K.T. Crowley: January Test Run #2K.T. Crowleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08211266985396588133noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-26697861168349170302012-01-24T09:20:53.237-05:002012-01-24T09:20:53.237-05:00I am a bit confused by this statement, "she c...I am a bit confused by this statement, "she couldn’t melt the ice that settled on her heart." I wish you had a follow up sentence that gave a little more insight into why her heart is covered in ice. I'm assuming that's a metaphor?<br /><br />"she gave the blood-rimmed manacles no thought; he had never used them on her", this creeped me out...in a good way. I really want to know what this ritual is!<br /><br />Very interesting first page. I would keep reading!AngelaCatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11733897520026606241noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-36014095916398393332012-01-23T11:24:33.862-05:002012-01-23T11:24:33.862-05:00Although I am not a gothic romance or mystery read...Although I am not a gothic romance or mystery reader, I did find this interesting. The language is a bit flowery for my taste, but again, I think that's the genre. I did find "fingers walking" a bit awkward.<br /><br />As for plot, I think it's quite intriguing and would want to find out where you are going.<br /><br />All in all, good job.Wagmorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13993245180731723628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-79928445274893252382012-01-21T15:33:44.184-05:002012-01-21T15:33:44.184-05:00I'd keep reading. I liked the set-up and voic...I'd keep reading. I liked the set-up and voice of this character and I'm curious to see what happens next. Great job!S.A.Husseyhttp://planted-n-paged.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-61252260366207334372012-01-21T11:23:43.315-05:002012-01-21T11:23:43.315-05:00This has come a long way and I like the feel of th...This has come a long way and I like the feel of the opening better. Nice job with the subtle tension leading up to the ominous ending description.Joyce Alton / @joycealtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06201548593592822776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-85329496270627143562012-01-21T09:28:54.038-05:002012-01-21T09:28:54.038-05:00I enjoyed this very much. The pacing was nice. The...I enjoyed this very much. The pacing was nice. There was just enough physical description mixed with setting details for me to be sucked right in. <br /><br />Also, really liked this line: “Hello again,” she whispered. “I guess it’s time.” <br /><br />I would definitely keep reading because I want to know if Father will turn on her and make her part of the ritual. <br /><br />My only concern is the title (I'm obsessed with titles)...Not really sure what it means or how it fits into Fantasy, but that may be explained later in the book.<br /><br />Overall, very nice!!karen Y. bynumhttp://www.karenbynum.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-8943613192470805702012-01-21T07:15:08.990-05:002012-01-21T07:15:08.990-05:00Sterling work and sets up the scene nicely. Defina...Sterling work and sets up the scene nicely. Definately has a gentle feel that is offset by an ominous background. I agree, it merits further reading.Revo Boulangerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09261275910728067043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1940209088259004106.post-80286349012825859702012-01-21T03:10:10.646-05:002012-01-21T03:10:10.646-05:00I like this and would definitely read on. Only a c...I like this and would definitely read on. Only a couple of thoughts: the repetition of fingers jarred me, as did 'her layers of thin clothing' (why not just 'her thin clothing'). And the line ' Through the winding hallways of the stronghold she padded,' made it sound like she was describing a place of work/ regular hang out (e.g that's where I go to pad the hallways), so perhaps 'she padded through...' <br /><br />I was definitely intrigued by paragraph one, but the last line of paragraph two and the final paragraph were even stronger, so maybe fiddle with using those as an introduction and see what happens.<br /><br />Good job : )katherineamabelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05886046787026184461noreply@blogger.com